This was the detailed storyboard my group used for our S4C practice run today. From previous examples the story has been improved greatly as there is more of a narrative this time with the father running to his daughter’s Eisteddfod, which he is late for, instead of a man aimlessly running through Welsh countryside. The idea was partially informed by research and partially expanded on by me as I have been part of a few Eisteddfods in my time at school. Being part of an Eisteddfod was one of the main points that came up when we researched key events that happen on St David’s day.
After we presented our pitch with confidence and really tried to sell our idea, we got some feedback about the storyboard to make a few little tweaks. It is basically to change a few scenes so the father is in a bit more of a rush and frantic. From our current story line all we see is him running and it looks like he is on casual jog to his daughters special Eisteddfod. The first scene should be of his daughter in her traditional Welsh attire waiting for him, wondering where he is. Then the second scene should then be of him receiving an urgent text from his wife. Those are the first scenes that need to be changed by Wednesday to add to the urgency.
The others we could change are of him just casually running through the Welsh scenery and add a bit of parkour. After doing a bit of research we found out a bit more about parkour. It is essentially extreme running which means people are running and jumping over things such as fences and gates etc. We decided we could add something like this into one of the scenes just to give it that bit of urgency it needs. Other than that we felt that our pitch and narrative behind our idea were pretty strong. The reason we felt this was because our narrative helps educate the audience what it is like about St Davids day and hopefully makes the 30% of viewers in England what to be a part of it. Additionally with the use of a family in the narrative we felt that this is something most people will relate to positively, which is why with a few small tweaks to the storyboard we will be able to pitch a good idea to S4C on Wednesday.